Saturday, October 16, 2010

Saturday Centus, Trick-or-Treaters of the Worst Kind

Jenny Matlock
Thanks to Jenny Matlock, we have a fun writing option each week. Jenny offers a prompt every Saturday. The challenge involves using this prompt in a piece that does not exceed 100 words. This week's prompt is bolded below. Enjoy, and may you have grateful trick-or-treaters or none at all!

TRICK-OR-TREATERS OF THE WORST KIND

“Trick or treat!” they shouted as the door opened.
“Smell my feet! Give me something good to eat!”
Beaming with embarrassment, they continued as rehearsed: “If you don’t, I don’t care. I’ll pull down my underwear.”

Jimmy grabbed the plastic pumpkin filled with treats.
“Lemme do it! My tearn!” Danielle shouted.

“Kids, remember to work together, just like we talked about.” Mom advised.
“O-tay,” Danielle agreed, pushing the pumpkin gently towards the guests, while Jimmy grasped its handle more tightly. The impatient trick-or-treaters snagged fistfuls of chocolate, running off with utter ingratitude.

“Grown-ups today!” Jimmy sneered, slapping his forehead in dismay.

30 comments:

  1. cute story. thanks for your comment on my post re listening. we need to listen then talk if indicated. have a great evening. rose

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  2. Yes gimme gimme never gets don't you know your manners yet? I hate that too . My brother used to make them sing before they got treats .

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  3. Yep! That's us! We'll do anything for chocolate! Right, Robyn??

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  4. You got it right the first time, sweetie!

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  5. heehee

    I'm with Judie...Anything for chocolate!

    =)

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  6. hee hee....


    Circus Peanuts would have been fought over worse!! Or maybe that's just me...

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  7. This was cute - grown ups indeed! I guess I'm with the majority here, anything for chocolate. Even singing goofy songs in public. And as anyone who knows me will attest, I can't carry a tune in a basket :) Kat

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  8. Good one.... :-) I'm all about "anything for chocolate", but I do hate the unmannerly ones. :-(

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  9. I never knew there was another verse to that LOL. Great story. I LOVE chocolate. I would probably be the rude one, ha.

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  10. Arrgh! I hate it when grown-ups trick-or-treat us! It's even worse than kids showing up without costumes. Loved your story as usual! Great job!

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  11. Ah memories of Halloween. 40 odd years haven't dimmed them. But I bet things have changed since then. Trick or treat!!!

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  12. There is just something about Halloween that brings out the greedy in kids.

    Teresa

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  13. Haha, I can just picture little Jimmy slapping his forehead in dismay. Maybe he should have had a French name as well.

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  14. Great job! I can picture Jimmy doing his impression of "Wow I could've had a V8!"

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  15. very cute, I almost went with the smell my feet...just loved that when I was little

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  16. The perfect prompt response. BTW...nice profile pic!!!

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  17. Yes, anything for chocolate, my friends. You got it, and you got me. Then again, who has ever made someone smell their feet in order to receive chocolate?? (I won't go into the underwear thing, because this is a family blog. Most of the time.) Thanks for your comments! xoxo

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  18. Was Danielle dressed as Buckwheat? :) (Thanks for your generous compliment about my writing on Friday's post! It made me smile)z

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  19. Yes, I do flick chocs from my nephew (or any one I know for that matter) when he is not looking. They had the perfect Halloween monster's excuse to be rude...love your play with words... ;)

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  20. Still giggling at the whole "smell my feet" jingle......so glad I wasn't the only one who used to chant that little ditty! (Somehow it sounds so much funnier now that I'm older, too.....what's up with THAT?!)

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  21. Loved this story! How many times did we think or say that growing up? Plenty!!

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  22. Great story, "feisty little jewish woman"...nice to meet you...Peace and blessings

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  23. Thanks, all! If you score some good (i.e., non-Hershey's) chocolate on Halloween, say "thanks." Then, feel free to share (with me). xoRobyn

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  24. I can just see Jimmy slapping his forehead!
    What a great image. As for the chocolate grabbing adults, well.......I want to hate the them, but I sure wish I had some of that chocolate. This story is well written and filled with images and memories of "Trick or Treat, Small My Feet!"

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  25. haha very commical. love how your story portrays a typical little boy and the funny things they come out with!

    Tina from Mummy Diaries

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  26. What a sweet link and great visual to this weeks Saturday Centus.

    After the last two scary ones I was really excited to read a 'smell my feet' type use of the prompt.

    I think we've had those trick or treaters a time or two here at the house!

    Thanks for linking. This was fun!

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