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Saturday, January 29, 2011

Blissful Torment, Saturday Centus

Jenny Matlock

The Saturday Centus challenges us to write a piece within 100 words, based on a prompt. I encourage you to jump aboard. It's great practice, and I've met wonderful peers this way. Plus, Jenny's our favorite teacher.
She's calmed down now. Thus, this one isn't as much fun as the last. It's more normal (thanks to Judie at Rogue Artists). I didn't take the prompt (bolded below) in a silly direction. Sorry.
 
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Blissful Torment 
 
Tormented by blissful memories, she needed to escape. Carmen climbed down into the basement, striking at cobwebs along the way. She landed in a pile of dust, the remedy before her eyes. Somehow its contents would fill the void. She lifted the stack of letters from the ancient chest. One lonely page floated onto the floor, urging her read. Nervously, she brought it closer. It was nothing special: “Dearest Carmen, I miss you. Please tell me how you have been.” Teardrops streamed her cheeks.  Just three years into their marriage, and he never talked like that anymore. 

Posted by Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com
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42 comments:

  1. IT (aka Ivan Toblog)January 29, 2011 at 12:28 PM

    Nice that this post didn't require any draconian measures

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  2. KatJanuary 29, 2011 at 12:47 PM

    Poor Carmen! This was a clever twist. Expecting letters from an old love, not her current one. Well done! Kat

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  3. elysabethJanuary 29, 2011 at 1:24 PM

    Each one has taken the prompt in a different direction which just goes to show how each of us interpret the same sentence - E :)

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  4. JudieJanuary 29, 2011 at 2:32 PM

    Ha! They all get that way when they fall out of lust.

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  5. Pat TillettJanuary 29, 2011 at 2:49 PM

    Really good Robin!
    Things change, that's for sure.

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  6. CBJanuary 29, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    Oh my! I love the direction you went. So sad - I feel like I could cry with Carmen.

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  7. Oilfield TrashJanuary 29, 2011 at 3:03 PM

    As always you did a great job.

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  8. CheeseboyJanuary 29, 2011 at 3:08 PM

    Robyn, you're writing is going to a whole new level. This was near genius.

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  9. Gorilla BananasJanuary 29, 2011 at 3:34 PM

    You've just written the perfect cue for Carmen to sing You've Lost That Loving Feeling.

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  10. AmesJanuary 29, 2011 at 3:39 PM

    When they say the honeymoon is over, it really is over. Once they got ya, they drop the formalities. Works both ways too. Loved the direction you took this prompt.~Ames

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  11. YvonneJanuary 29, 2011 at 3:59 PM

    Awww, how terribly sad for her! Great write!

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  12. Susan AndersonJanuary 29, 2011 at 4:01 PM

    That guy needs to shape up.

    Well done, Robyn!

    =)

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  13. Rawknrobyn.blogspot.comJanuary 29, 2011 at 4:04 PM

    IT, yeah, I'm going to try taking a break from draconian measures for -say- the rest of my life. xo

    Kat. Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed. ;0)

    Elysabeth, thanks, new friend - for the comment and follow. I've reciprocated. xo

    Judie, ain't that the truth!? [o:

    Pat, thank you. xo

    Cherie, me too. Please pass the tissue. ;-}

    Mr. O, I always appreciate your visits and comments. thanks. xo

    Cheeseboy, wow, I'm really flattered. Thanks. You always inspire me with your creative hilarity. [o:

    GB, great idea for the next scene. Thanks. xo

    Ames, thanks for the reminder that it works both ways. Phew. Now we can all feel a bit better. Right? =o>

    Thanks, Yvonne. It is sad. xo

    Sue, yeah, kinda makes you wanna ring his neck, huh? {-:

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  14. VikiJanuary 29, 2011 at 5:46 PM

    Awww, poor Carmen. That's the way it goes sometimes or most times, ha.

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  15. Ca88andraJanuary 29, 2011 at 6:34 PM

    After fighting with my phone I'm just in the mood to tell Carmen to get out of the dust, wipe her eyes and kick that guy out of her life! However, I'll take a deep breath and just say - well done!

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  16. BookieJanuary 29, 2011 at 6:57 PM

    Ah, this is a sad take...too real!

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  17. SarahJanuary 29, 2011 at 7:01 PM

    I thought three years is a long time for a guy. But that could be just my opinion. :)

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  18. Rawknrobyn.blogspot.comJanuary 29, 2011 at 7:49 PM

    I agree, Sarah. I just gave him the benefit of the doubt - by about 3 years. I'm overly generous that way. xo

    Bookie, thanks. ;0)

    Ca88, thanks for the laughs. Sorry for your phone battles, though. xo

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  19. Baby SisterJanuary 29, 2011 at 9:59 PM

    Wow. This was beautiful!! Well done my friend, well done.

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  20. jeff campbellJanuary 30, 2011 at 7:35 AM

    Juicy Robyn...filled with emotion, perhaps a touch of angst, and great imagery...way cool...Peace

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  21. David MacaulayJanuary 30, 2011 at 7:57 AM

    I love the twist Robyn - that's marriage for ya...

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  22. TinaJanuary 30, 2011 at 12:01 PM

    Nicely done, Robyn! Takes a lot to keep a marriage humming, that's for sure...

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  23. Dazee DreamerJanuary 30, 2011 at 3:44 PM

    Oh man. That gave me goosebumps. And a feeling of sorrow. Great job.

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  24. Bossy BettyJanuary 30, 2011 at 4:12 PM

    Great job, Missy!

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  25. JoJanuary 30, 2011 at 6:18 PM

    Yeah ... so sad that it turns that way for some ..

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  26. MarnieJanuary 30, 2011 at 7:49 PM

    Great job! Scarily accurate too.

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  27. Rawknrobyn.blogspot.comJanuary 30, 2011 at 8:19 PM

    Thank you all. Excuse me while I take Carmen out for drinks. xo

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  28. Rek SeshJanuary 31, 2011 at 2:44 AM

    Got to see a different and equally creative side of your writing...emotional and tad sad but it happens too often, sometimes within the first 6 months...Btw, why are the letters in the basement not her bedroom drawer?...that's where I would keep my hubby's letters if he ever wrote them...

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  29. Not So Simply SingleJanuary 31, 2011 at 8:47 AM

    Loved it! You are a poetic, magical writer. I wish you the publishing that you deserve!

    Lisa

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  30. 21 WitsJanuary 31, 2011 at 10:00 AM

    Ah great take on this!

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  31. ThePeachy1January 31, 2011 at 11:59 AM

    wow, that was freaking awesome ! I could never do this challenge I can't even keep my comments under 100 words. crap.

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  32. MarleneJanuary 31, 2011 at 12:11 PM

    Powerful!!! I love the way you write.

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  33. UnknownJanuary 31, 2011 at 12:56 PM

    Oh, stop it! You are going to make me cry...

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  34. RobinJanuary 31, 2011 at 12:59 PM

    Hey your on LOL today..! woo hoo..!

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  35. Rawknrobyn.blogspot.comJanuary 31, 2011 at 8:36 PM

    Peachy, you always make me laugh. xo

    You're all making me blush. Thanks so much. Ooh, Robin, I'm coming by. Thanks. ;0)

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  36. georgia ~ gi giFebruary 1, 2011 at 1:21 PM

    Bravo Bravo, good job( from one divorcee to another ;)Aw, sad and sadly true!
    You have some funny followers. love to read all the comments!
    xo
    gi gi

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  37. MarlaFebruary 3, 2011 at 9:15 PM

    Carmen needs to whip that boy into shape.

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  38. cj SchlottmanFebruary 4, 2011 at 6:57 AM

    I love your concrete images. I can feel those creepy spider webs and I'm choking on the dust! Great writing with a wonderful twist..........cj

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  39. MariaFebruary 7, 2011 at 1:03 AM

    Very true! Like.

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  40. JennyFebruary 8, 2011 at 4:57 PM

    Husbands!

    Can't live with 'em.

    Can't kill 'em all.

    Oops! Did I say that out loud?

    Great imagery.

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  41. Rawknrobyn.blogspot.comFebruary 8, 2011 at 5:31 PM

    Thank you, ladies.
    Jenny, oh no, nobody heard that truism.
    xoRobyn

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  42. NonnaFebruary 12, 2011 at 4:36 PM

    Oh, so sad...and GOOD Job !!!

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