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Saturday, January 29, 2011

Blissful Torment, Saturday Centus

Jenny Matlock

The Saturday Centus challenges us to write a piece within 100 words, based on a prompt. I encourage you to jump aboard. It's great practice, and I've met wonderful peers this way. Plus, Jenny's our favorite teacher.
She's calmed down now. Thus, this one isn't as much fun as the last. It's more normal (thanks to Judie at Rogue Artists). I didn't take the prompt (bolded below) in a silly direction. Sorry.
 
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Blissful Torment 
 
Tormented by blissful memories, she needed to escape. Carmen climbed down into the basement, striking at cobwebs along the way. She landed in a pile of dust, the remedy before her eyes. Somehow its contents would fill the void. She lifted the stack of letters from the ancient chest. One lonely page floated onto the floor, urging her read. Nervously, she brought it closer. It was nothing special: “Dearest Carmen, I miss you. Please tell me how you have been.” Teardrops streamed her cheeks.  Just three years into their marriage, and he never talked like that anymore. 

42 comments:

  1. Nice that this post didn't require any draconian measures

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  2. Poor Carmen! This was a clever twist. Expecting letters from an old love, not her current one. Well done! Kat

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  3. Each one has taken the prompt in a different direction which just goes to show how each of us interpret the same sentence - E :)

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  4. Ha! They all get that way when they fall out of lust.

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  5. Really good Robin!
    Things change, that's for sure.

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  6. Oh my! I love the direction you went. So sad - I feel like I could cry with Carmen.

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  7. Robyn, you're writing is going to a whole new level. This was near genius.

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  8. You've just written the perfect cue for Carmen to sing You've Lost That Loving Feeling.

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  9. When they say the honeymoon is over, it really is over. Once they got ya, they drop the formalities. Works both ways too. Loved the direction you took this prompt.~Ames

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  10. Awww, how terribly sad for her! Great write!

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  11. That guy needs to shape up.

    Well done, Robyn!

    =)

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  12. IT, yeah, I'm going to try taking a break from draconian measures for -say- the rest of my life. xo

    Kat. Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed. ;0)

    Elysabeth, thanks, new friend - for the comment and follow. I've reciprocated. xo

    Judie, ain't that the truth!? [o:

    Pat, thank you. xo

    Cherie, me too. Please pass the tissue. ;-}

    Mr. O, I always appreciate your visits and comments. thanks. xo

    Cheeseboy, wow, I'm really flattered. Thanks. You always inspire me with your creative hilarity. [o:

    GB, great idea for the next scene. Thanks. xo

    Ames, thanks for the reminder that it works both ways. Phew. Now we can all feel a bit better. Right? =o>

    Thanks, Yvonne. It is sad. xo

    Sue, yeah, kinda makes you wanna ring his neck, huh? {-:

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  13. Awww, poor Carmen. That's the way it goes sometimes or most times, ha.

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  14. After fighting with my phone I'm just in the mood to tell Carmen to get out of the dust, wipe her eyes and kick that guy out of her life! However, I'll take a deep breath and just say - well done!

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  15. Ah, this is a sad take...too real!

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  16. I thought three years is a long time for a guy. But that could be just my opinion. :)

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  17. I agree, Sarah. I just gave him the benefit of the doubt - by about 3 years. I'm overly generous that way. xo

    Bookie, thanks. ;0)

    Ca88, thanks for the laughs. Sorry for your phone battles, though. xo

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  18. Wow. This was beautiful!! Well done my friend, well done.

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  19. Juicy Robyn...filled with emotion, perhaps a touch of angst, and great imagery...way cool...Peace

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  20. I love the twist Robyn - that's marriage for ya...

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  21. Nicely done, Robyn! Takes a lot to keep a marriage humming, that's for sure...

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  22. Oh man. That gave me goosebumps. And a feeling of sorrow. Great job.

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  23. Yeah ... so sad that it turns that way for some ..

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  24. Great job! Scarily accurate too.

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  25. Thank you all. Excuse me while I take Carmen out for drinks. xo

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  26. Got to see a different and equally creative side of your writing...emotional and tad sad but it happens too often, sometimes within the first 6 months...Btw, why are the letters in the basement not her bedroom drawer?...that's where I would keep my hubby's letters if he ever wrote them...

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  27. Loved it! You are a poetic, magical writer. I wish you the publishing that you deserve!

    Lisa

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  28. wow, that was freaking awesome ! I could never do this challenge I can't even keep my comments under 100 words. crap.

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  29. Powerful!!! I love the way you write.

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  30. Oh, stop it! You are going to make me cry...

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  31. Hey your on LOL today..! woo hoo..!

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  32. Peachy, you always make me laugh. xo

    You're all making me blush. Thanks so much. Ooh, Robin, I'm coming by. Thanks. ;0)

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  33. Bravo Bravo, good job( from one divorcee to another ;)Aw, sad and sadly true!
    You have some funny followers. love to read all the comments!
    xo
    gi gi

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  34. Carmen needs to whip that boy into shape.

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  35. I love your concrete images. I can feel those creepy spider webs and I'm choking on the dust! Great writing with a wonderful twist..........cj

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  36. Husbands!

    Can't live with 'em.

    Can't kill 'em all.

    Oops! Did I say that out loud?

    Great imagery.

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  37. Thank you, ladies.
    Jenny, oh no, nobody heard that truism.
    xoRobyn

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