Tuesday, May 8, 2012

Jack and Jill, Then and Now

In 1978, at age 12, I wrote this:

Jack & Jill

Jack & Jill had a race up a hill 

to see what was in the water.

Jack said with a frown,

"My pants are coming down!"

and Jill was filled with laughter.


Today, as a less innocent and more cynical 45er, I wrote this:

Jack's Rude Awakening

"Hey Jack," said Jill. "I'm off the pill.

Just didn't wanna bother.

Get work, you clown!

Quit falling down

'Cuz soon you'll be a father."

25 comments:

  1. Very good for twelve years old! The second one is scary accurate though.

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  2. Wow! Such talent, at such a young age. 45, i mean, of course.
    :)
    I lubs ya, girl.
    oooxooo--Dawn

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  3. I prefer the old Jill who laughed at Jack's nekkid butt. The new Jill is too much of a fishwife for my liking.

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  4. The one you wrote at age 12 has rather sinister undertones. What exactly was in that water?!?

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  5. Strangely enough the second one is what happened with me. Well, I had a reason for going off the pill, but the result was the same.

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  6. Jill number 2 is just so mean. But true none the less.

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  7. I love the comparison between the first poem and the second Robyn, the second is actually true of what some poor guys do have to deal with actually.

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  8. Jack and Jill went up the hill
    Jack's credit card was denied at Motel 6.

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  9. Alex, yeah, it's pretty much your reality Tv script. Isn't it? Thanks.

    MsA, glad you like it!

    Dawn, I lubs ya for pointing out that (of course) 45 is the young age you're referencing. I REALLY lubs ya for that!

    GB, she is rather evil, to put it nicely. After all these decades, though, don't you think Jack should start growing up?

    Rosalind, you're right. I guess I always had a sinister streak. I'm kinda proud of that now, though would've denied it as a youth.

    Ruth, I hope he got work immediately.

    Pat, she's not the sweet Jill we thought she was. Is she?

    YW, I sincerely feel sorry for those guys. Whenever I see couples in which the man is clearly too good for the woman, I wanna kick her to the curb and step in. But I'm too sweet for that. =)

    Al, the guy's too naive. He believes Motel 6 is called Motel 6 because they still charge only $6 per night.

    You all make me laugh. Thank you!
    xoRobyn

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  10. That was hilarious! Thanks for sharing. :)

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  11. the second one has pretty much ruined by memories of the nursery rhyme as kid

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  12. Wow! They grew up pretty cynical didn't they? That was funny though.

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  13. LOL Funny. Quite a funny update. Can you do something with Diddle Diddle Dumpling My Son John.

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  14. Christine, my pleasure. Thank you.

    David, you mean the original rhyme in which Jack incurs head injury is more pleasant than his impending fatherhood? Yeah, I see what you mean.

    Chuck, I guess the hill-fall-tumble activity didn't inspire a positive outlook. Being a klutzy cynic myself, I understand.

    Stephen, well, I'll have to give that one a go. He's the one shoe off, one shoe one boy, right?

    xoRobyn

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  15. Yes he got a job. Surprising to many, I am sure, that we are still together.

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  16. Even at 12 you knew about surprise endings! The second surprise is even better! Julie

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  17. that was too funny, robyn! thank you:)

    big hugs!

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  18. you are so funny!
    Still good after all those years...

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  19. how true this is! Very accurate and funny take on Jack and Jill

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